If words be water,
I would gather them
by my palms
drenched in rain
with folded arms
and then leave them
all, drop and then a drop
with due diligence
to let them find
their destined path
while I take pride
in their journey
that marked them
from the others
when I am done
with my treasure
all I have to do
is pray to those
heavenly skies
for a glorious shower
yet again
If words were water
would I want a river or rain?
If words were water
there never would
be silence again
If words were water,
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14 comments:
"my palms
drenched in rain
with folded arms
and then leave them
all, drop and then a drop
with due diligence"
Oh, so you would become one with the words, like kids playing outside in the rain?
That's beautiful.
If words were water
would I want a river or rain?
what a questions!!! well posed.
scott
I dont have the answer Thomas, its my muse :)
yes the lines Scott has highlighted really grabbed me too.....I like how your ending is a return too. Nice write.
Sarayu,
In the end, do you mean a rejecting silence, or a peaceful one? To me there's a difference.
So when you say,
If words were water
there never would
be silence again
Do you mean it in a positive way? Like the rippling sound of water words?
I think your poem is lovely, I just wanted to ask that question. And I like the question you pose in the poem too. I think I'd like a warm rain. :)
What a lovely meditation on words. :) I think the repetition works very well... nicely done!
Hello Cristina,
In the end by leaving it incompletei mean there is so much more to add , but then thta i couldnt ocver cause the extent is to vast, if words were water, i meant it in a good way.
and even when i say there wouldnt be silence i mean it in a positive way, that anyone will not fall short water , and everyone will have some thing to say :)
Lovely! Water always follows the path of least resistance. If words were, indeed, water then I think they would make their way to the page with less effort than it often seems to take.
if words were water....wouldn't we all drown in a flood of drooling mouths?
actually, the words previously highlighted by scott and others, i thought were very deep and thought provoking. very nice.
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beautiful...a crystal inside a splash
Wonderful images and the repetition follows the sense in a really nice way.
Very thought provoking indeed as is the open end ... I like the whole idea of comparing words to water
This poem feels very spiritual to me, the honoring of words.
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