so close to truth
yet so far..,
riding on a dream
that fell apart
in the shoes that
walked me to hell
a ray undefined
found me soul dead
in the dark oddness
an obtuse hope
woke me up
& I walked away
never looked back...
Saturday, February 23, 2008
Blurred Slumbers
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Jurek Karwowski- photography
so close to truth
yet so far..,
riding on a dream
that fell apart
in the shoes that
walked me to hell
a ray undefined
found me soul dead
in the dark oddness
an obtuse hope
woke me up
& I walked away
never looked back...
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Very powerful!
A wonderful piece. I wish you posted more often. I suppose I post too much, though.
the "yet so far" is somewhat cliche. pulls me from the poem.
hope all is well.
This is excellent, somber and moving
This really works for me, not a word too many, beautiful flow, very well done.
just stoppin' by.
an obtuse hope - hope is never too clear but I think it's always there even when you don't think so. thought provoking poem.
Very nice! I love anything to do with dreams. My favorite lines-
riding on a dream
that fell apart
in the shoes that
walked me to hell
You create an eerie mood, a twilight world that is close to the truth, but yet not quite the truth. Beautiful work. I see a progression in your poems, a deepening. I like the different themes you are pursuing. :)
hey, waiting to see a blog on ur 3yrs exp in US.
here once again. hope you're well.
back again. hope all is well.
Mm. This is lovely - I too especially enjoy the image of "the shoes that walked me to hell." There is such movement in this small piece - I feel it dropping downward and then, unexpectedly, rising out of the depths at the end.
This hit me 100%. Lovely.
"in the shoes that
walked me to hell"
Wow! Lovely and poignant! I adore the picture you chose to go with it.
nice one.. keep up the good work :)
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How very intriguing and wonderfully noir...
Rob
Image & Verse
Hi, I am a poet with a poetry blog and website.
Your blog is GORGEOUS.
I would like to know if you would be interested in exchanging links? I have placed your link at:
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and
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Would you like to link back to my site and my blog?
I have also created a blog where you can register and publish your own poems and stories. I would love to have your contributions if you are so inclined. The blog is
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"never looked back" makes a powerful line... great post!
Your words are awesome, and I
have felt this, lived there.
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