Friday, February 01, 2008

Water like


If words be water,
I would gather them
by my palms
drenched in rain
with folded arms
and then leave them
all, drop and then a drop
with due diligence
to let them find
their destined path
while I take pride
in their journey
that marked them
from the others
when I am done
with my treasure
all I have to do
is pray to those
heavenly skies
for a glorious shower
yet again
If words were water
would I want a river or rain?
If words were water
there never would
be silence again
If words were water,
……

14 comments:

Anonymous said...

"my palms
drenched in rain
with folded arms
and then leave them
all, drop and then a drop
with due diligence"

Oh, so you would become one with the words, like kids playing outside in the rain?

That's beautiful.

Anonymous said...

If words were water
would I want a river or rain?

what a questions!!! well posed.

scott

S.K said...

I dont have the answer Thomas, its my muse :)

Anonymous said...

yes the lines Scott has highlighted really grabbed me too.....I like how your ending is a return too. Nice write.

Anonymous said...

Sarayu,
In the end, do you mean a rejecting silence, or a peaceful one? To me there's a difference.

So when you say,
If words were water
there never would
be silence again

Do you mean it in a positive way? Like the rippling sound of water words?

I think your poem is lovely, I just wanted to ask that question. And I like the question you pose in the poem too. I think I'd like a warm rain. :)

Anonymous said...

What a lovely meditation on words. :) I think the repetition works very well... nicely done!

S.K said...

Hello Cristina,

In the end by leaving it incompletei mean there is so much more to add , but then thta i couldnt ocver cause the extent is to vast, if words were water, i meant it in a good way.
and even when i say there wouldnt be silence i mean it in a positive way, that anyone will not fall short water , and everyone will have some thing to say :)

Unknown said...

Lovely! Water always follows the path of least resistance. If words were, indeed, water then I think they would make their way to the page with less effort than it often seems to take.

K.M.Ryan said...

if words were water....wouldn't we all drown in a flood of drooling mouths?

actually, the words previously highlighted by scott and others, i thought were very deep and thought provoking. very nice.

writerwoman said...

I have mentioned this poem at PWB. Thanks for being on our blogroll.

crimsonflaw said...

beautiful...a crystal inside a splash

Anonymous said...

Wonderful images and the repetition follows the sense in a really nice way.

Anonymous said...

Very thought provoking indeed as is the open end ... I like the whole idea of comparing words to water

Cynthia said...

This poem feels very spiritual to me, the honoring of words.